Re: 15) the powering protoss

I don't think this is regarded as a poem. It's like they're playing a game of "I Own You."

 

Look's like a haikus to me , a type of japenese poetry I beleive , it is a very good haikus

 

Haiku with 17 syllables? I thought it was only 13?

 

Yeah haikus is 5/7/5 sylable's in each line , 5 first , 7 second and 5 third! and it's done correctly so I ain't sure what Yur on about dude.

 

i don't really get this...

 

um... well, yeah

 

Umm wtf is that

 

Me neither...

 

I dont know much about poems, but I like this. Its fast, swift, hard and cool all at the same time.

Its like a action movie.

 

I like it

The life in a game of major pwnage

Why can't my battles on b-net be like this rather than the other way around :\

 

i think the person just wanted some attention cause im not getting it. but thats just me

 

kool, but not much of a poem

 

Well, it's a haiku. It's another type of poem. But the syllables are pretty messed up.

 

Thankyou Josh! , someone understand's poetry!

 

in all honesty, it just feels like a very amateur attempt... there's nothing to pull the reader in - it's not necessary to always use emotion but even interesting wording would help... if it is supposed to be haikus - then the form wasn't followed very well because the syllable counts are of in quite a lot of it

good effort with telling a complete story, just if you do this again - try to focus on including some element that will make your writing connect to the reader

not trying to be harsh - just trying to give as honest and helpful feedback as possible, pz

 

it's a nice effort, the author is only a kid

 

well, I don't know who the author is - and after thinking about it and getting some opinions I decided it was best to try to be as honest as possible

allow me to repeat however that I'm not trying to hurt anybody's feelings... if poetry isn't a serious hobby to you, then just ignore my typing and don't let it bother you - it was a valuable submission - and I'm glad he participated