Re: 10) Zerg

interesting

 

I like it.

 

I actually really like this one.

I can tell you one thing for certain. This is the weakest part of the poem:

Otherwise it's seamless, conveys a message that I understood, and has a solid theme. Well written, even though short.

 

That's the idea behind the last line not rhyming. It stands out of place and makes you linger on it.

Obviously it made you do it too

 

short and sweet, i like it

 

I don't want to be abrasive... but I felt like the person who wrote this must be quite young. It feels a bit too simplistic to me. appreciate the effort however - pz pz

 

Well to most of the people here, it's their first try.