Hell's Brethren (Chapter One)

Finally got done with the first chapter. I've been working on it between my other things, cramming it in when I had free time. Enjoy :3 (also please tell me any typos you see xD )

chapter1

The chapter is here since it won't all fit in one post xD

 

You always use Gaia for your media.

 

because every other site i try won't DL it >: (

 

That sucks.

It's good, but I always thought Akara was older then the rogue captain.

 

she is, i think.
did i put otherwise?

 

Yes you did.

 

where? O O

 

"Know this, Amazon, Akara may be our spiritual leader, but I command the Rogues in battle. It will take more than just killing a few beasts in the wilderness to earn my trust."

"This woman was older, and had been hardened by battle in ways Amazhie could not yet compare."

There. Third to last paragraph.

 

older than amazhie, not than akara xD

 

Meh, I realised that after reading it again, and right after posting this.

But at first, I was like wtf, akasha is not even close to akara's age.

 

I've totally seen this coming.

 

yay one smart person =D
*gives meee a box of cookies*

 

I thought i posted here already.... did someone deleted my posts!?
I will say this again, nice chapter kurai, lulz

 

hanks MC =D
no, i didn;t delete it xD

 

Well Sh********************t.

Kurai, I always liked your art despite some obviousise imperfections. I love your art.

Your writing...however;.........
I'msorry,


yet I must pause.
Your writing is amazing, real, so incredibly immersive for a young amateur author

Please add more soon.
I have never seen better fanfiction on the net.

GJ; no jk

(You know what a judgmental and critical prick I can be...so you must understand my praise is sincere and enthusiastic.)

 

^ kurai found a way to remove the 'last edit by' line?

just found time to read it, well not really but did anyway, its amazing.

 

@Blood, thanks for your kind words. And yes, coming from your that's like...wow :3
yeah, i've been working at it for quite some time, i really appreciate it, especially because this stuff takes me forever, considering I'm doing fifty other things lately =P
Hopefully, I'll be able to squeeze my d2 fanfic in, I'll start working on it soon though, either way.

@Overmind, XP
and thanks x3 I take pride in what i can do :3

 

Great

 

i just got done reading the prologue, and seeing the story of the dead necro, i knida figured that was around the end of D1 and beginning of D2. it's made sense to me.
scale of 1-10 i'd say 10. the old starcraft.org site has some good s**t, but none were as elegant as yours.
i will say, keep up the good work

 

Nice fan fiction Kurai. It's more like real life things then fiction things. In a game or normal fan fiction, she would have never passed out. Those are kind of....questionable and bad. But your writing has more real life things going on then fiction. 20 out of ten is what I'd give it. I mean it just has so much description and ......It's just amazing!